The Keep talk:The Tide Trident Questline

A few grammar/spelling edits
Because I am a grammar nerd, I have a few edits. Please don't take offense, I know English is not your first language, and the stuff you've written is impressive. It's just a very technically complex language that I am a native speaker of ;)

For Part 1:
 * No space after "Aurakami"
 * [...] what makes him rage like this; However [...] --> Use a period instead of a semicolon.
 * ​[...] make you breath underwater [...] --> It should be "breathe", the verb form.

For part 2:
 * [...] pass over 'Mossy reef" where countless ships [...] --> Capitalize both words in Mossy Reef, and there's no need for quotation marks. Also, put a comma after Mossy Reef.
 * [...] suddenly escape their skeletons [...] --> "Escape" sounds weird in this context as it usually means getting out of an enclosed space. "Rise from" or "detatch from" sounds a little less awkward.
 * [...] start “swimming” towards you. [...] --> The combination of quotation marks and the word "swimming" emphasises the awkwardness or silliness of a swimming skull, which is not necessarily what you want here. "Shooting" or "rising" or even "rocketing" gives an impression of swift, straight, dangerous movement.
 * [...] shouts Kiwibot -who guides your way to Poseidon's castle-, [...] --> Replace the dashes "-" with parenthases "".

(will add more after lunch)

Ajehy (talk) 18:11, June 22, 2014 (UTC)